Link to my new short story: Taking Care of You
“I thought I was dreaming when I first saw you," he said.
“How did you know it was me?” she asked. “I could have been anybody. A thief even.”
He smiled wearily. “I don’t know many thieves who would look at me with anxious eyes and then cry because I was sick,” he mumbled.
Is it possible for love to bloom, sight unseen? Juhi and Abhay are strangers who know each other better than they know themselves. One night changes the equation and the even tenor of their lives and puts all their doubts and fears to rest.
“I thought I was dreaming when I first saw you," he said.
“How did you know it was me?” she asked. “I could have been anybody. A thief even.”
He smiled wearily. “I don’t know many thieves who would look at me with anxious eyes and then cry because I was sick,” he mumbled.
Is it possible for love to bloom, sight unseen? Juhi and Abhay are strangers who know each other better than they know themselves. One night changes the equation and the even tenor of their lives and puts all their doubts and fears to rest.
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Link to my first e-novel; A Home for Meenakshi
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"I love the way you love, Meenu," he whispered, his eyes on hers. "Such loyalty, such passion..."
Meenakshi Sharma, an orphan, lives in Varanasi with her uncle, a chronic bachelor who wants her to become a professional musician. She unwillingly relocates to Delhi to study under a renowned musician for eight months. Staying for rent in the outhouse of the Agrawals, she meets Aditya Agrawal, an attractive young man brooding over the memories of his horrendous past. Pulled between her uncle's expectations of her and Aditya's love for her, Meenakshi struggles with her feelings. How can she disappoint her uncle who had devoted his entire life to her upbringing? How can she pretend to be blind to Aditya's feelings for her? A romance that moves between the alleys of the holy city of Varanasi and the modern city of Delhi.
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Dedicated to Supriya Sahasrabuddhe (Sups/ aniyathi). She wanted Mami and Payal to plot to bring A-K together. So here goes,
Part 7
ASR came
down to breakfast, his laptop bag in hand. He pretended not to notice the
silence at his entry or that Khushi was seated with NK.
He took his
seat.
Payal, as
she had been doing every morning, served him and then went to sit by her
husband.
ASR stole a
look at his di’s face. She was pale, nervous.
Mami was sitting on the edge of
her seat.
Nani was looking at him and at Khushi.
Finally
mami dared to draw his attention to Khushi’s presence at the table.
“Arnav
bitwaa, look who hajj come to join ujj. Khussi, Payaliya’s choti behena,” she
said.
Arnav
lifted his head to bestow a distant glance at Khushi. He nodded.
Khushi
looked down at her untouched plate.
“This is
what we wanted to tell you when you returned from office last night, Chotey,”
nani said.
He nodded.
“Chotey,
you don’t know Khushiji well, do you? I don’t think you were introduced at the
shaadi,” Anjali began, hoping to give him a positive picture of the victim of
their machinations.
“We met
last night,” Arnav said shortly.
Many wide
eyes looked at him in shock and dismay.
“It is
strange how with eight guest rooms in this house, our guest was given the room
adjacent to mine and she was found wandering in my garden at night,” he said
bluntly.
Some faces
paled, some reddened. Akash and NK looked merely confused.
Khushi
looked down at her plate, her jaw clenched.
“Nannav,
chill,” NK finally said. “Khushiji won’t disturb you. We are planning to have
fun. This will be a week Khushiji will never forget.”
ASR stood
up. “I am sure it will be,” he said laconically before leaving.
He left
behind him silence.
Nani, mami and
Anjali were ashamed to look at Khushi.
Payal felt terrible.
Akash said
apologetically, pushing his specs up his nose, “Khushiji, please don’t feel
bad. Bhai is short-tempered. Small things irritate him and what with his
diabetis and long working hours, he gets testy sometimes. Please don’t take it
to heart.”
Khushi
tried to smile. In her head, she was frying Arnav Singh Raizada in a vat of
bubbling oil while haranguing Devi Maiyya for putting her in a spot.
“Khushiji,
come out with me,” NK invited. “I will take you to my gym and introduce all the
guys to you. Then we can go to a nightclub in the evening.”
Khushi
opened her mouth to refuse the ‘treats’ Nanheji was hanging before her, but
nani beat her to it.
“NK bitwa,
who do you think Khussi bitiya is? She is your sister. Will you take her to
your gym and a nightclub? What will Sasiji think of us?” nani asked.
“You are
right, saasumma. NK bitwaa, take her to an isspaa. Tell them Manorama
Raijjada’s name. They will do massage and phacial free free, Hello Hi Bye Bye,”
mami told him.
“Manorama,”
nani glared at her.
Anjali
asked sweetly, “Khushiji, shall we go to a temple nearby? After that we can
plan our shopping and enjoy the sights and sounds of Delhi.”
Khushi
said, “Ji,” with a smile. As long as the sights she had to see in Delhi didn’t
include Arnav Singh Raizada and the sounds she had to listen didn’t include his
reprimands, she could see and hear anything and be happy.
***
Khushi was
with NK, eating his chips and listening to him massacring Hindi as he
introduced her to Laxmi, nani’s goat.
Payal was
outside, seeing off Akash.
Anjali,
mami and nani were in the living room, deciding the menu for lunch.
“Naniji,”
came HP’s hesitant call.
“Kaa hua,
Hari Prakashji?” nani asked.
“I went to
Arnav bhaiyya’s room to clean it,” HP paused.
Nani nodded
encouragingly.
“We will
have to order a new mirror and a table,” HP said. “The room is in a bad shape.”
All
frowned.
“Kaa hua,
HP?” mami asked. “New furniturewaa? But we changed everything in the housewaa
six months back.”
“Mamiji,
woh—Arnav bhaiyya ghusse mein—hum kya bataaein aap ko? please come with me and
look at the room,” HP finally said.
The ladies
followed him on quick feet.
HP opened
ASR’s door and the ladies gasped.
***
Anjali,
mami and nani stood by after praying as Payal, Khushi and NK walked around taking
in the beauty of the temple and its premises.
Akash had gone to the office.
“The last
time hamre Arnav bitwaa attacked furniturewaa wajj two years back,” mami
informed them thoughtfully.
“Yes,
mami,” Anjali agreed. “It was when Singhania tried to cheat him by supplying
third-rate fabric. Chotey totalled his room first in anger that he had been
taken in by the crooks’s smooth ways and then he demolished Singhania. Neither
he nor his ghatiya business exists now.”
“Chotey met
Khussi bitiya last night and then returned to his room to wreck it. Anjali
bitiya, Manorama, this does not bode well,” nani said sadly.
Anjali
nodded, her lips drooping.
“Think
positive, saasumma, Anjali bitiya,” mami exhorted.
Nani looked
at Manorama with anger in her eyes. “Tell me, Manorama. What is positive about
Chotey destroying his room?”
“Kahiye na,
mami?” Anjali too wanted to know.
“Saasuma,
Anjali bitiya, Akass bitwaa wajj telling ujj that businejj is booming. He ki
naahi?” mami asked.
“Yes,” nani
and Anjali agreed.
“To Arnav
bitwaa ko kahe ki tensionwaa he? Bhy? Bhy did he break the tablewaa?” mami
asked.
“Because he
met Khussi bitiya and didn’t like her?” Anjali surmised.
Mami
grimaced. “Hamre Arnav bitwaa ijj isstupid, but not that isstupid,” she said.
“If he didn’t like Khussi, he would have ignored her like he did today morning.
Room ka satyanass karne ki kaa jaroorat rahe, saasumma?”
Nani and
Anjali looked at each other.
“Listen to
me, saasumma, Anjali bitiya. Kucho to baat he. There ijj something wrong. He
met Khussi, room ko barbaad kiya and then ate breakphast with her without
saying anything to her? Inbestigation karega padi,” mami concluded.
“Maybe,”
Anjali said hopefully. “It sound odd when you put it like that, mami.”
“Odd hi to
he, Anjali bitiya. Hamre Arnav bitwaa ijj odd. To uska pyaar bhi odd hi hone ki
padi,” mami stressed.
“I hope you
are right, Manorama,” nani said. She turned to look at the sanctum sanctorum.
“I hope Devi Maiyya answers our pleas.”
***
Arnav
glared at Akash.
“What are
you doing here?” he asked. “I thought you were escorting your sister-in-law
around Delhi.”
Akash
smiled. “They are at the temple now, bhai. After lunch, they are planning to
shop. NK is with them anyway and Mohan is driving them. So I thought I would
get some work done, bhai,” he said easily.
The acid of
jealousy burned ASR’s gut. NK was going to spend time with Khushi? He was going
to take her around Delhi, stuck to her like conjoined twins?
“You left
them to the care of NK? That nitwit?” he asked, furious.
“They are
going to buy clothes, bhai and that too at Anamika’s boutique. Di managed to
get an appointment at one. What can possibly go wrong?” Akash asked in
bewilderment.
“It is no
use expecting you to handle this, Akash. The fault is mine,” ASR fumed. “I
should have taken care of this.” He marched out of the room to save the world,
his coat swirling behind him like Batman’s cape.
“Handle
what?” Akash asked aloud. “Take care of what?”
Aman came
in to collect ASR’s laptop.
“What is
wrong with bhai?” Akash asked him in genuine confusion.
Aman
smiled. “When has anything been right with him?” he asked gently.
“Woh bhi
sahi he. You are right,” Akash had to conceede.
***
Sasi called
Khushi.
“Bitiya,
are you enjoying spending time with Payaliya?” he asked.
“Yes,
babuji, but I will be back in one week,” she vowed. “I miss making sweets and
working with you.”
“And
nagging Preetho and laughing with Munna and Krishna,” Sasi added, smiling.
“Woh bhi,”
she admitted. “I like Lucknow, babuji, not Delhi.”
Sasi
smiled. “What have you seen of Delhi to dislike?” he asked softly.
Khushi
pursed her lips. An honest answer would give him a heart attack and she wanted
to avoid that. “Nothing, babuji,” she said.
Sasi said
softly, “Titliya, we have no idea where you will be married off, where your
sasuraal will be. It maybe in Lucknow, but it may also be in Kanpur, Delhi,
Mumbai, Surat, Indore or any other place. You have to adjust, bitiya.”
“Yes,
babuji,” Khushi said, her face cross.
“Are
Payaliya’s in-laws treating you well?” Sasi asked.
Khushi
paused for a moment. Then she said, “Yes, babuji. They took me to the temple
today. In the evening they are taking me to a dress shop.”
“Khussi,
use the credit card I gave you. Don’t be miserly. You know we can afford it,”
Sasi reminded her.
“I have
enough clothes at home, babuji. And what I don’t have, I can stitch,” Khushi
replied.
Sasi shook
his head. “You have been working at the shop since childhood, bitiya, doing the
work of two people. Do you know how much money I owe you?” he asked.
“Babuji,”
Khushi protested.
“Buy
whatever you want. There is enough money in the account for you to buy all of
Delhi,” Sasi reassured her. “Waise you were supposed to stay there for two
weeks, weren’t you?” he asked curiously.
“Don’t tell
amma and buaji. I managed to bring it down to a week. Babuji, bahut yaad aati
he Lucknow ki,” Khushi said.
“I won’t
tell them. But what will you do if your sasuraal is far away, Khussi? Think
about that,” he reminded her.
“I will
think about it later,” Khushi said. “Babuji, is it not possible for me to
remain a spinster and live with you all my life?”
“Give the
phone to Payaliya,” Sasi said. “And ask this question to your buaji if you
dare. She will twist your ear so bad that it will be red for days.”
Khushi
smiled and went in search of Payal.
***
Khushi
walked into a huge, posh building with the Raizadas at one.
Anjali
talked to the receptionist who allotted them a smiling attendant who took them
via a glass-walled lift to the third floor.
Khushi
looked around with wide eyes. All around her were mannequins wearing elegant
gowns, designer lehengas and specially crafted sarees. Familiar with embroidery
and stitching as most girls in Lucknow were, she could appreciate the selection
of fabric and the quality of the work.
“Beautiful,
isn’t it?” Anjali asked in a whisper.
“Bahut,”
Khushi had to say.
“Anamika is
the best. And getting an appointment here is next to impossible,” Anjali
murmured.
Khushi
nodded.
“The bridal
section covers the first two floors,” Anjali said softly.
Khushi
nodded.
“Do you
like lehengas or sarees, Khushiji?” Anjali asked.
“Ji...”
Khushi’s voice trailed away.
“Buy both,”
mami advised. “How can any girlwaa hab too many dresswaa? Buy, buy.”
“Take
whatever you want, Khussi bitiya. Don’t be shy. You are our daughter, just like
Payaliya,” nani said with a smile.
“Ji,”
Khushi said slowly. She peered at the price tag of a lehenga worn by a
mannequin standing near her and felt her head spin. Hey Devi Maiyya! There was
no way she could let the Raizadas pay if she bought even a handkerchief here,
she thought.
“Khushiji,
this is so beautiful, isn’t it?” NK asked, pointing to a yellow sari.
Khushi
smiled weakly.
“I will
model it for you,” he offered. He went to stand by the mannequin, lifted the
pallu from it with a murmured apology and then draped it over his shoulder.
“Kya
khaayal (wounded) he?” NK asked Khushi.
“Khayaal
(thought), Nanheji,” she whispered. “Put it back. Koi dekh lega.”
NK removed
the pallu from himself and tried to arrange it on the mannequin in stealth. The
mannequin wobbled.
“Sorry,” NK
told the lifeless form. He tried to make it stand.
It wobbled
again.
“Stand
straight,” he hissed. “Had a beer too much?” he asked sympathetically.
“Chodiye
usse,” Khushi told him softly. “The attendants are looking.”
NK let go.
Thankfully the mannequin stood straight.
Khushi
grabbed his hand and pulled NK away before he did more damage.
“I lub that
saree,” mami pointed to a rich green saree with loads of gold work. “Payaliya,
buy it,” she suggested.
“Saasumma,
it will suit you better,” Payal said softly.
“Haan,” mami
replied thoughtfully. “Let me shock Akass bitwaa’s papa with it, hello hi bye
bye.”
“With the
bill or by wearing the saree, Manorama?” nani teased softly.
“Donon,”
said an unrepentant mami.
All
laughed.
“Khushiji,
did you see anything you like?” Anjali asked her.
“No,
Anjaliji,” she replied.
“Then will
you wear this for me?” Anjali asked, pointing to a dress the assistant was
holding up.
Khushi
stared at the rich fabric, speechless.
Payal added
her bit. “Khushi, wear it. It will look good on you,” she insisted.
“Yes,
Khushiji,” NK requested.
Khushi
could only nod.
She walked
behind the assistant to the changing room.
“Payaliya,
try thijj saree,” mami pointed at a pink silk saree.
Payal
nodded and went with an assistant to try it out.
Nani and
Anjali sat down on the plush chairs arranged for convenience.
Mami and NK
looked at the mannequins.
“Nk bitwaa,
ijj the mannequin thinner than me?” mami asked NK, striking a pose near one.
“No, maasi.
You are thinner than it,” NK lied.
Mami smiled
happily and opened her mouth to thank him. Her mouth remained open and no sound
emerged from it.
NK turned
to see what had made his maasi look like a snake that had swallowed a tractor.
ASR was
being escorted to join his family.
Nani and
Anjali jumped up from their seats.
“Chotey?”
“Arnav
bitwaa?”
“Nannav?”
ASR ignored
the questions on the faces of his family and said casually, “Anamika designs
for us once in a while.”
Before
anyone could ask him what he was doing in their midst, he asked, “Where is
Payal?”
Distracted,
nani said, “Payaliya is trying out a saree. Khussi bitiya too.”
The door of the changing room opened.
All eyes
turned to look at the pari emerging from the room.
Khushi was
in a rich red lehenga, her hair unbound, her eyes lowered.
Khushi felt
his eyes on her body and looked up.
He was
staring at her, an unreadable look in his eyes.
She turned
her head, averting her eyes.
Anjali
breathed, “Khushiji, that lehenga was made for you. You must take it.”
“Yes,
Khussi bitiya,” nani seconded.
“Take it,
Khussi. You look tip tap in it,” mami declared.
Khushi
swallowed hard. Wanting ASR to see her doing so, she slowly lifted the price
tag and looked at it.
Thirty
thousand rupees.
She could
afford it. But she wanted to teach the great Arnav Singh Raizada a lesson.
“It is
beyond my budget, Anjaliji,” she said softly. “We are middle class people.”
ASR’s heart
stopped. She hadn’t forgotten.
“There is
no budget for our sister, Khushiji. Take whatever you want,” Anjali said, meaning
it.
“Don’t you
think it shows too much of my waist? Woh kya he, naniji, I don’t want anyone
thinking that I am flaunting my assets to attract them,” Khushi said softly.
The ladies
rushed to assure her that it was perfectly modest.
NK said, “Khushiji,
leejiye na? It makes you look like a lollipop.”
Khushi and
the ladies burst out laughing.
Then Khushi
said, “No, Nanheji, I won’t buy it. If I do, then ants will nibble on me.”
All laughed
except ASR with burning eyes and a sore heart.
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Rash's interpretation:
Part 7
ASR’s quiet entry and sticking to his daily routine of having his breakfast before going off to work as though unaware of Khushi’s presence was unpalatable to the rest making them jittery… Silence is the best way to let someone know they did wrong… It is the most eloquent of replies… When Mami finally took the initiative to point out the presence of a guest amidst them, he deigned to look into her face and give a slight nod… Nani’s words that this was what they wanted to let him know the previous night and Anjali’s machination to introduce Khushi to him met with a stumbling block with the news that they had already met the previous night… His sarcasm laced statement, it being strange, of the eight guest beds in the mansion the one next to his, with access to his garden, was the only room that was fit to be occupied by her… His statement though greeted in silence, elicited response only from NK of keeping her out of his hair… Nani, Mami and Anjali had the grace to look shame-faced for their plotting and Payal felt terrible… Just a statement from him gave them an inkling that he had cottoned on to their plan! Akash’s attempt to smoothen his brother’s behavior was met with a stoic smile by Khushi, though her mind was recalling the scenes of her kitchen with vats of oil just ready to fry jalebis… and she silently groused about these situations her Devi Maiyya had put her in… NK’s offer to escort her to his gym and the nightclub was met with a chide from Nani asking him is that a fit place to take his sister to? Mami’s spa too was shot down. Anjali’s temple visit to begin with was endorsed by the rest … It was decided later it would be shopping time… Khushi was happy to go along with any of their plan as long as it was sans ASR and his shadow…
When HP told them they needed to replace a few pieces of furniture in Arnav’s room all were flabbergasted as to what had caused him to unleash this destructive instinct… Last time it had occurred, it had decimated a rival who had tried unlawful means… When the rest felt gloomy thinking it to be due to the presence of Khushi… Mami was elated… She could see the positive in the situation… Mami’s intuition and deduction on which her understanding of the situation is based, was spot on… Her take on it was, if he didn’t like Khushi… he could have resorted to ignoring her like he had done that morning… But after meeting her, his emotions had been unleashed in his room on his furniture… Though odd, it seemed like a feasible explanation… Mami stressed this very oddity of not venting it out in the open is what is making her think… after all love is an odd thing… as odd there is… and when it comes to Arnav bitwa it becomes all the more odd that spills on to his behavior too… Hence it calls for an investigation… These thoughts coming on in front of Devi Maiyya in her temple made Nani seek her blessings for the success in their endeavor….
Arnav who knew the family were to go on a shopping spree with Khushi had thought Akash would be taking them around… But seeing Akash’s presence in the office his knee-jerk reaction was to question him why was he there when he was supposed to take his sister-in-law around Delhi… But the minute he heard NK was escorting them he did a double take, the green monster raised its head and Akash’s assurance that they would be at Anamika’s where they could not come to any harm had no effect on the fretting and fuming ASR… With his coat thrown on his shoulders like a cloak, his expression like a man on the mission to save the planet, ASR breezed past Akash without wasting a minute to give his brother an explanation as to why it was a necessity… A flabbergasted Akash was brought to earth by the Mr. Dependable, Aman, as to when were they ever privy to ASR’s thoughts?… When ASR is in the ASR mode of silently posing the query… it isn’t who is going to let me; it’s who is going to stop me… it’s better to give him a huge leeway…
Shashi Gupta, who had sent his grown up younger daughter to his eldest daughter’s house where there were eligible bachelors too, called up and enquired Khushi, how was she feeling amidst the Raizadas? Her response that she would be back in a week to help him out with orders had him prod gently why? Her reply that she loved Lucknow better than Delhi made him ask how could she conclude so without even venturing out? Her silence made him tell her that there would come a time when she too would have to leave their nest to build her own nest and she would be needed to make a lot of adjustments… Her still reluctant answer made him enquire further of her activity and came to know that they were scheduled to go shopping sometime later that day… Shashi insisted her on using the credit card and not to think of the money as her account had enough to spend as and if she wishes… When her reluctance to be away from them for more than a week was voiced out… Shashi asked her to mentally prepare herself if her in-laws lived far away and she had to go a long distance… He squashed her thoughts on living a spinster’s life with the dare to say so in front of her Buaji…
Anamika’s was an enchanting place… A boutique housing the best of Anamika’s exclusive collection… It was a connoisseur’s delight… Khushi being well versed in the art of embroidery and stitching could appreciate the finesse and the standard it had adhered to… Raizada’s while explaining the layout of the boutique… asked her to buy anything that took her fancy after all she was a daughter of the house just like her sister… Though Khushi nodded her head, the price tag showing her how pricey the clothes displayed were, had her decide not to accept even a handkerchief as a gift from the Raizadas… NK who was with them tried hard to make her choose something but met with no success… Even when the rest had chosen Khushi was quiet. At Anjali’s insistence, Khushi consented to try out a lehenga and Mami made Payal try a pink silk saree…
Mami who was about to thank NK for his compliment that gave her a boost to her beautiful self was so blown away by the sight before her that she was rendered speechless…. Seeing her startled expression NK turned his head and followed her line of vision only to see his Nannav being led to them… Giving a nonchalant shrug he just stated that sometimes Anamika freelanced for him too… wanting to know about Khushi he asked where Payal was and pat came the reply from the wise matriarch of the family that she was trying out a saree and so was Khushi… Cleverness is when you believe only half of what you hear… but brilliance is when you know which half to believe… Good old Nani!
The sound of the door opening had all the eyes turn and out came a feminine pulchritude… For ASR, a person who was used to being surrounded by beauties… a beauty with a glowing face, glowing with a light in the heart became irresistible… that too swathed in the misty fabric of the color of his choice… she in the red lehenga with its gentle sweeps, looked like a flowing river, coursing freely, sparkling brilliant and ploughing his imagination… His thoughts from his soul too flowed with no forcing… no holding back… opening up to a joy unparalleled… But to others ASR was seen with an indecipherable expression… Though he was quiet… others were vocal in expressing their happiness to see this beautiful young maiden and told her to go for it… Checking the price tag, she knew that it was something she would love to possess and was within her power of buying… You are free to make whatever choice you want but you are not free from the consequences of the choice… Her mind wanted to teach ASR a lesson… Arnav needed to learn that his actions affect others too… One needs to be careful of what they say and do as it is not always just about them….
Her soft spoken words to his Di… that it was beyond her budget… the budget of a middle class girl had ASR know she had not forgotten his words… Anjali brushed it off saying that it was from them which was concurred by Mami and Nani… But Khushi persisted in asking whether it was not a revealing outfit and she did not want anyone to think that she had stripped and had done it purposely to tease them… Though the ladies assured her it was within the decency permit, she was determined to haul ASR over the coals… At NK’s description of it being as enticing as a lollipop, she laughed and told neatly then it was a definite no as it would lead for ants to crawl on her…
Khushi is bestowed with the power of knowledge of knowing Arnav’s thoughts about her… Knowing that words can inspire or destroy, she is choosing her words well to her advantage… Her words are effectively making Arnav’s hands tied and eat the humble pie alone while his family is trying to soothe her ruffled feathers unwittingly… Arnav is left with the thought … Had he exercised a moment of patience in a moment of anger it would have saved him from a hundred moments of regret…
There is nothing in this world that can trouble you more than your own thoughts…
That was a good update Smita …
Wonderful update Smita. Loved the entry of Anamika in this story as well. I can't wait for the next update
ReplyDeleteAt last was able to post a comment. Sorry about not being able to post previously due to some issue in posting but was able to read it. Hopefully, I will be more regular in the future.
ReplyDeleteThank you first and foremost for starting this new story and secondly for the daily updates. It has become a habit to check your blog out before winding up my day. This is a wonderful way to escape.
Loving the storyline and the characterization.
As much as I like ASR his way of speaking to Khushi was uncalled for and he will repent enough before he is forgiven. Loved the spirit of Khushi and her giving back where it oh so hurt.
Happy Diwali to you and your family!
...... place for friends, for fun, a place to escape to when real life gets difficult.... How true!,, I love all your stories to bits... Thank u
ReplyDeleteFantastic update ..Smita!
ReplyDeleteYour penning this one superbly! I think each and every character is perfectly written! Hats off Dear.. Wow nice to get such frequent updates! Thank you :))))
Wonderful updates. Tried to post for chap 6 but could not. ASR has his work cut out for him. Waiting for more.
ReplyDeletewow! superb! please....next part
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ReplyDeleteI loved what Khushi did
And omg Arnav is here
Poor guy is so tortured yet he came I love it
I hope he buys it hehe
Smita, you always outdo yourself! When I read Burning in Your Love I thought you couldn't do better than that and then you came up with Living Without You! When I thought His Smiling Girl was the best of all you came up with Keeping Khushi! Each story of yours feels like the best thing I have ever read! Here again I feel that nothing could be better than this story but secretly I am wishing for you to prove me wrong again!
ReplyDeleteThis was such an amazing update! Loved each and every scene of it....the breakfast scene, Khushi's conversation with her father was so emotional and tells us a lot about her inner turmoil and her sense of being alone in a strange place. Loved Arnav's jealousy and Khushi's way of a payback. She hit a raw nerve when she reminded him of his past allegations. I want to see how they both change each other's views about themselves. It is going to be interesting to see these characters unfold and their personalities to flower! I can see them blossoming in each other's love! I am sure Arnav would shower her with the most passionate love we have seen in a long time and would buy the world for her! Really can't wait to read the upcoming chapters. Please update soon!
You are spot on RIGHT my friend. I agree with you a 100%
DeleteYour updates are coming in fast and furious. I was just about to ask you when I saw this. Anamika is back - loved that character. Will she be designing special outfits for Khushi thus adding to ASR's misery? I'm having too much fun with this update. I can visualise the characters saying these dialogues. Will comment later once I get over this googly eyed state.
ReplyDeleteYou are right, and i want to thank you for making me forget and making me love life again and again. (i just could not stay silent today)
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love this story as always i like the way you woven the scene in this update what a good comeback by khushi.
love the frequent updates.
God bless you
wow beautiful update loved it can't wait for next part thank you...........ameena671
ReplyDeleteKushi conversation with her dad tells a lot about her life ,and Arnav has to really change his whole outlook before she can trust him ,I liked that she gave back to him what he accused her off ,she is not enamored by his wealth or his status ,looking fwd to how he changes that ,
ReplyDeleteKhushi is fantastic here! The way she paid back I like the most :)
ReplyDeleteSasi is so understanding...And Mami is just really something!
As for ASR, of course, watching Khushi in beautiful lehengas and sarees is much more interesting that working in office,isn't?=))))))
Thank you very much for this update, Smitaji! =))))
P.S. Really, Khushi, why do you need any lehengas and sarees from Anamika (I also remember this character,she was brilliant in Finding Khushi!!) if ASR has a collection of dresses made specially for you?
Awesome
ReplyDeleteKhushi is in Delhi only for a week right? It seems too short a time for everything to be resolved. Will Khushi extend her stay 'cos I can't see ASR ready to confess within week. Loved the way you worked that bridal shopping scene in. One of the many heart wrenching scenes in the show but now I'm somewhat mollified.
ReplyDeleteAhh Smitar, you star!! What a wonderful way to top off a weekend. I was hoping you'd post again and you did!! Thank you...Loving the darker flavour of this one.
ReplyDeleteI have read all of your stories.. But never commented.. I absolutely love your style, elegant style of writing, your themes and the way how kushi and arnav bond together either in hate or in love...
ReplyDeleteThe moment i read about Anamika, i could remember your lovely story (Keeping Kushi or something, where Anamika and Ganesh was a pair) i loved it... Cheers lady!!!! keep going!!!
Beautiful, gal you rock 😊
ReplyDeleteLove it love it love omg i am so loving Khushi giving the Asr it back loved how she showed him that she have not forgotten his words amazing update brilliant .
ReplyDeleteKhushi taunting him.... My god what he will do now
ReplyDeleteWonderful update.... khushi gave a fitting reply to all ASR's tauntas...
ReplyDeleteThanks for giving frequent updates...
Wonderful update.... khushi gave a fitting reply to all ASR's tauntas...
ReplyDeleteThanks for giving frequent updates...
Wonderful part
ReplyDeleteKhushi is a fighter...and she would give arnav a piece of her mind if she could. She is only silent because of payal.
Continue soon
Awesome updare!! Go Khushi go lol, I am sure Arnav will find a way to manaofy her :-) loving the daily updates Smitha, keep them coming hehehe!!!!
ReplyDeleteWell kushi is giving as she got......Well girl I hope you don't bring the wrath of ASR again....
ReplyDeleteYes ASR, of course she remembers! Did you think she would forget so soon? I thought I should feel sorry for ASR, but then I decided he deserves to suffer a little bit more (just a teensy bit). Way to go Khushi. She got her point across to ASR but at the same time ensuring that no one else felt the tension. After all they were her jiji's in-laws. Wonder what DM has in store for the 2 of them. When are you updating next?
ReplyDeleteSMITAJI, HAPPY DIWALI TO YOU AND ALL YOUR FANS!
Now the ball is rolling.
ReplyDeleteHey Smita
ReplyDeleteHow are you ! Do you remember me ! Long time !
Caught up with your stories after a long time...Should I even say that I loved them...:)
And look who is here...Anamika...is Ganesh coming too :)
Love you and all that you write.
Will regularly read from now on and comment.
Happy diwali to all of you :)
Yeh asr bhi nahi...abhi bhi he is acting rude...Gud khushi is taunting him in a nice way...wud luv to see asr in jealousy..hahahhahaha....aman told rite..'when has anything been rite with him'...hahahahahha...yehi asr ka kya hoga is attitude se....nice update. ...thanks for update....And happy diwali
ReplyDeleteHappy Dhanteras! Happy Diwali to all of you!!
ReplyDeleteNice update. Awesome Smita. The fireworks have started between Khushi and ASR....right on time for Diwali. Can't wait for the next update. Will you update daily Smita? This story is just creating more curiosity and impatience to wait for updates..lol...
ReplyDeleteWishing all a wonderful and happy Diwali!
At last! Was waiting for your interpretation Rash. "Had he exercised a moment of patience it would have saved him hundreds of moments of regret" - Yup! you hit the nail on the head. That's the ASR we all know and love - the one suffering from a chronic case of foot and mouth disease. - Open mouth, put foot in. "You are free to make your choice but not free from the consequences of your choice" - where do you come up with such profound statements. By the end of this story I think we should compile a list and put it up separately.
ReplyDeleteWish you and yours a very Happy Diwali.
From my repertoire... ha ha...;)
DeleteHappy Diwali to you all too...
Wonder how Arnav will respond to that!
ReplyDeleteI will start with my fav lines, coz I can't help it... So
ReplyDelete1. Hamre Arnav bitwaa ijj isstupid, but not that is stupid,
Rolling on the floor... How could you not love this Mamiji and this attitude?
2. He marched out of the room to save the world, his coat swirling behind him like Batman’s cape.
Marnay ka iraada hai kya... Arnav qaafi nahi jo 'batman' bhi bana diya usko? Seriously the image, that my mind gleefully drew up was both drool worthy and swoon worthy!
Now to the chapter... He is fighting a losing war, or rather a LOST war... Rassi jal gayi hai par bal nahi gaya... Mami ji ko to pehle hi pata chal gaya hai... He will find out soon enough.
In the original show... there was only one thing Shyam said that I really liked... what he said about being careful how we did things in life coz there is no Rewind Button. I bet, right now, Arnav is wishing and praying wholeheartedly for one...
Loved the update........ASR do not understand that he is in love.........Mami's intuition should help bring Arnav and Khushi together........
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