Link to my new short story: Taking Care of You
“I thought I was dreaming when I first saw you," he said.
“How did you know it was me?” she asked. “I could have been anybody. A thief even.”
He smiled wearily. “I don’t know many thieves who would look at me with anxious eyes and then cry because I was sick,” he mumbled.
Is it possible for love to bloom, sight unseen? Juhi and Abhay are strangers who know each other better than they know themselves. One night changes the equation and the even tenor of their lives and puts all their doubts and fears to rest.
“I thought I was dreaming when I first saw you," he said.
“How did you know it was me?” she asked. “I could have been anybody. A thief even.”
He smiled wearily. “I don’t know many thieves who would look at me with anxious eyes and then cry because I was sick,” he mumbled.
Is it possible for love to bloom, sight unseen? Juhi and Abhay are strangers who know each other better than they know themselves. One night changes the equation and the even tenor of their lives and puts all their doubts and fears to rest.
http://pothi.com/pothi/book/ebook-smita-ramachandran-taking-care-you
Link to my first e-novel; A Home for Meenakshi
http://pothi.com/pothi/book/ebook-smita-ramachandran-home-meenakshi
"I love the way you love, Meenu," he whispered, his eyes on hers. "Such loyalty, such passion..."
Meenakshi Sharma, an orphan, lives in Varanasi with her uncle, a chronic bachelor who wants her to become a professional musician. She unwillingly relocates to Delhi to study under a renowned musician for eight months. Staying for rent in the outhouse of the Agrawals, she meets Aditya Agrawal, an attractive young man brooding over the memories of his horrendous past. Pulled between her uncle's expectations of her and Aditya's love for her, Meenakshi struggles with her feelings. How can she disappoint her uncle who had devoted his entire life to her upbringing? How can she pretend to be blind to Aditya's feelings for her? A romance that moves between the alleys of the holy city of Varanasi and the modern city of Delhi.
A blog for my VMs:
http://smitarsvms.blogspot.in/
Part 6
Arnav woke
up early, earlier than the birds. He looked down at the soft, warm and comforting weight on his chest.
Khushi was lying draped all over him, her fingers still clutching the neck of
his T-shirt.
He could
stay like this forever, he mused.
He clenched
his jaw. ‘Focus, focus, ASR,’ he told himself.
Gently, reluctantly,
he removed her hand and her body from his and got out of bed.
Khushi moved
her limbs restlessly at the loss of her warm pillow.
He held his
breath. Would she wake up? She needed the rest.
Khushi
settled down again.
After a
quick visit to the bathroom and a last look at an unconscious Khushi, Arnav
locked the door and went down to the phone booth.
Calling
Akash would be dangerous, he thought. Payal might wake up and Akash may have to
tell her the truth. Aman was a better bet.
He looked
around.
The desk
held a different receptionist and he was snoring away, his head resting on the
white desk.
Arnav
quickly moved into the cubicle and shut the door behind him.
“Hello,”
Aman sounded alert even at dawn.
“ASR here,”
Arnav replied.
“The police
got the two thugs and their driver last night, sir,” Aman relayed. “They
divulged details of the driver who tricked you. He too has been picked up by
the sleuths. You and Khushiji are safe, ASR.”
“Except for
Shyam,” ASR growled.
“Except for
him,” Aman agreed. “The Commissioner called ten minutes back, Sir. He said that
the assailants sang like birds. There is ample proof to nail Shyam twice over.”
Arnav drew
in a deep breath of relief.
“Akash sir
gave me your present address. Shall I send Mohan with your official car?” Aman
asked.
“No,” Arnav
ruled out the suggestion. “If Shyam finds out, he will escape our trap.”
“True,”
Aman mused. A moment later, he suggested, “Shall I send my bike over?”
Arnav
thought for a second. “Yes,” he replied. “Who will bring it here?” he asked.
“Mehul, the
son of the security guard at my flat,” Aman replied. “He is the one who rode it
from Jalandar to Delhi for me. He stays in the guard’s flat on the ground
floor.”
“Ask him to
knock on the door of 310 and to hand over the keys to Sunil Dhawan. Aman, make
arrangements for the boy to return to Delhi,” Arnav instructed.
“Yes, sir,”
Aman agreed. “He will reach there in about three hours. Please call me once you
reach Delhi. I will inform the Commissioner.”
“Yes,”
Arnav agreed. “Aman, send two helmets with him. We can’t be too careful.”
“Yes, sir,”
Aman replied.
“Thanks,
Aman,” Arnav whispered. He was lucky to have someone so trustworthy as Aman on
his side. Aman deserved a raise, a serious raise.
“It will
feel good to see the slimeball in jail, sir,” Aman said softly.
***
Arnav
returned to the room, his hands full of clothes he had purchased from the store
by the restaurant. He unlocked the door, placed the bags inside the room and
shut and locked the door.
He walked
to sit by a sleeping Khushi.
She looked
exhausted, sunk in deep sleep.
‘Let her
sleep,’ he thought.
All hell would break loose once they reached Delhi. Shyam
would fight back. There was no doubt about that. He wouldn’t slink away
silently. Shyam had millions to lose. And Di would be caught between the
husband she adored and the brother she loved.
He buried
his head in his hands, his heart heavy with sorrow. Was there no end to the
pain and humiliation his sister had to suffer in life? Was his family cursed as
Nani often said? How hard he had tried to outrun his past! But he had been
running in circles. He was where he had started sixteen years back.
Khushi
stirred, turning towards him.
He lifted
his head and looked at her sweet face, as innocent in sleep as she was when
awake.
Khushi and
Payal too had been dragged into the mess that was the Raizadas, he thought
regretfully. They deserved better, much better.
Khushi
curled into him, seeking his warmth and presence even in her sleep.
He
swallowed hard. Fate. Destiny. He had never believed such stuff existed. But
maybe they did. Otherwise why would Khushi be bound to him for life? She
should have married a boy from Lucknow
with good parents and a loving family, not a hard-nosed, heartless ASR from a
dysfunctional family.
He sat by
her for hours, his elbows on his knees, his fingers clasped, his heart filled
with regret.
***
Hours
later, a knock sounded on the door.
Khushi
stirred.
Arnav
strode to the door and pulled it open before Mehul could knock again.
A young man
stood there with two helmets hanging from his arm. “Sunil Dhawan?” he asked.
“Yes,”
Arnav replied.
“Aman sir
asked me to give you the key and the helmets,” he said, holding out the bike’s
key and the black helmets. “Pulsar. Black, In the parking lot.” the boy said,
reciting the registration number.
Arnav took
the key and reached for his wallet to pay him.
The boy
stepped back. “Aman sir has already paid me,” he said.
“Thank
you,” Arnav said.
The boy
nodded with a smile.
“How will
you get back?” Arnav asked.
“A friend
accompanied me on his bike,” Mehul said. “If there is nothing else...”
Arnav
nodded.
The boy
left. Arnav shut the door and turned around to see Khushi sitting up in bed.
“Kya hua,
Arnavji?” she asked, her eyes wide in apprehension. “Who was it?”
“Mehul.
Aman sent him with the bike keys. All have been caught, except Shyam,” he said
simply.
She sagged
in relief. “Bike?” she asked curiously.
“I don’t
want to spook Shyam. If he vanishes before we get him, it will be a long time
before we can lay our hands on him. And till he is caught, we will have to live
in fear. So I told Aman not to send me a car from the office. He has sent me
his bike. We need to leave immediately, Khushi,” he said softly.
“Ji,” she
said, jumping out of bed and moving to the bathroom. “Did you sleep well?” she
asked.
“Yes,” he
said, opening their bag and dumping their belongings on the bed.
When Khushi
returned from the bathroom, she was greeted by a black shirt and a pair of
black trousers set aside for her.
“Wear them,
Khushi. It is going to a long, cold ride,” Arnav warned.
She nodded
uncertainly.
“We can’t
take the clothes or the bag. Keep the bundle with your jewellery close to you,”
he instructed.
Khushi
nodded and moved to the bathroom with her new clothes to change.
“Tie your
hair in a bun,” he said. “It will be easier to wear the helmet.”
“Ji,” she
agreed.
Arnav
quickly donned his new weatherproof jacket and pocketed the bike keys and his
wallet.
Khushi
emerged from the bathroom feeling self-conscious. She tugged at the shirt,
hoping to make it cover her butt.
Arnav
spared her a look and quickly averted his eyes. She was hazardous to his focus and
his concentration and his heart in anything she wore.
He held out her jacket.
She wore
it. He zipped her in.
He handed
her a helmet. She picked up the small bundle of her jewellery.
He dumped
the rest of the clothes in the bag and left it on the bed. They left the room
and made their way downstairs.
It was still early in the morning and cold. Very
few people were awake and moving.
They
approached the sleeping receptionist.
Arnav
banged on the desk.
The
receptionist jumped, blinking sleep-filled eyes.
“We are
vacating the room,” Arnav said brusquely, dropping the keys on the table.
“Yes, sir,”
the man said, quickly calculating the rent.
Arnav paid
the bill and holding Khushi by her arm, led her to the bike he could see in the
car park. He confirmed the number and got on, pushing the key into the cavity.
He pressed
the switch and the engine roared to life. Arnav drew in a deep breath of
relief.
There was a
small pouch on the petrol tank to store valuables.
“Khushi,
give me the bundle,” he said.
She handed
it over.
He pushed
it into the pouch and fastened it.
“Get on,”
he invited. “Put your legs on either side, Khushi. Delhi is a long way off,” he
advised. “Wear the helmet.”
“Ji,”
Khushi said. She wore the headgear and holding his shoulders, clambered on the
bike to sit behind him.
He waited.
She moved
her hands more firmly on his shoulders and clung on.
He sent the
bike moving, riding out of the car park on to the highway towards Delhi.
***
They sped
along the road, leaving heavier vehicles behind. Khushi hung on for her life,
her arms around Arnav’s waist, her jacket-covered front pressed against his
back. It was still early in the morning. Trees and houses passed in a whirl
before Khushi’s eyes and the cold wind threatened to throw them off the
monster. Khushi shut her eyes. She clung to him like a limpet, feeling every
movement of his muscles as he swerved or changed pace.
“Focus on
the road, ASR,’ he told himself. ‘Delhi. Home. Shyam. Not the girl plastered to
your back.’
He took a
bend in the road smoothly.
“Hey Devi
Maiyya, raksha karna,” she whispered, her lips moving against the centre of his
back.
They
covered miles in silence, feeling the engine roar and rage beneath them. Khushi
shivered from the cold, unable to feel her fingers anymore. She crawled closer
to him, if that were possible.
‘Shyam,
Shyam,’ Arnav chanted in his mind. ‘Once Shyam is out of our lives, we can get
on with our marriage,’ he comforted himself.
He halted
the bike near a telephone booth.
He loosened
the helmet and pulled it off his head.
“I need to
call Aman,” he explained to Khushi.
She nodded.
With great difficulty, she moved her frozen legs and staggered down from the
bike. He joined her and holding her arm, took her into the booth.
He quickly called Aman’s number.
“Hello,”
Aman responded on the second ring.
“We will be
at the Commissioner’s office in ten minutes,” Arnav informed him.
“I am waiting
there, sir,” Aman replied.
Arnav cut
the call. He looked at a Khushi who had her arms around her trunk and was
trying bravely not to shiver.
“Just ten
minutes, Khushi,” he soothed her, his voice gentle and cajoling.
Khushi nodded
obediently, her spirit willing but her body fatigued.
Arnav wore
his helmet and led her to the bike. In a few seconds, they were on their way.
Part 7 (Hoping to post in a couple of hours)
“Chotey,
kyun?” Nani asked.
“He is not
worthy of the love and respect we gave him, Nani,” Arnav said. He looked at
Shyam. “Finding out about my marriage shattered you. You had to kill me and
Khushi to control my money. You hired killers to do the dirty job. They failed
you.”
“Anjali
bitiyaa, drink this juuuus,” Mami held out a glass of orange juice.
“No, Mami. My
Chotey and Khushiji,” Anjali wept. “Who knows if they have had anything to eat
or drink?”
Shyam
looked at the display of his phone. Why had his fifteen calls to the hired
killers gone unanswered? Where were they? Had they managed to get hold of Arnav
and Khushi?
Payal sat
by them, too exhausted to even weep.
“He Devi
Maiyya, please bring back my children safe and sound,” Nani prayed.
“Hamre
Arnav bitwaa, hamri Khussi bitiya,” Mami lamented. “Bhere are they? Kono ice
cube to naahi ke meltwaa ho jaaye, gayab ho jaaye! They are human beings. How
can they be missingwa?”
Akash
averted his eyes from the anguish of his family, feeling terrible.
“Don’t worry,
Mami,” Shyam said. “We are doing our best.” If only these hags would stop
nagging him! He needed more money, urgently. Maybe the boys were holding out
for payment!
Akash
clenched his jaw.
“Acha? Then
bhy are they not here?” Mami asked. “It hajj been three days, damadji. Bhere
ijj my Arnav bitwaa and his bife?”
“Mamiji,”
Shyam was exasperated.
“Go to the
police, Akass,” Mami ordered. “I don’t care if your businesswaa phalls down. Go
to the police.”
Nani, Payal
and Anjali perked up.
“Mate,”
Akash tried to stop her.
Mami stood
up. “Ijj the businesswaa more important than hamre Arnav bitwaa and Khussi
bitiya?” she asked. “Your Arnav bitwaa apne jaan diya for you, got married for
you and you can’t go to the police bhen he is missingwaa?” Her eyes were filled
with tears.
“Mate,
please sit down,” Akash panicked. “Let’s talk about this.”
“Mami, you
are endangering Arnav and his wife,” Shyam tried to block her.
“Don’t talks
to me,” Mami waved the men away. “Both of you are useless, Hello Hi Bye Bye!
Waste! I bill go to the police.”
“Yes,
Manorama,” Nani supported her.
Anjali and
Payal stood up in support.
Mami
marched to the door. Akash tried to stop her by throwing his arms wide. She
ducked under his arm and strode to the door, the pleats of her Benarsi sari flying
in the wind at her rapid movement.
Shyam
jumped to stand before her, blocking her path to the door. “No, Mami,” he said,
his eyes red, his nose twitching, a drop of sweat on his temple.
“Get out of
my ways!” Mami ordered imperiously.
Shyam
advanced towards Mami, his eyes murderous. Akash made to step between them.
The door
bell rang.
Shyam turned to look at the shut door with alarmed eyes.
Akash
almost collapsed in relief. He rushed to open the door.
Aman
entered the house, his wise eyes taking in Shyam and Mami’s stance.
“Aman!” Mami
called in relief.
“Amanji,”
Anjali cried.
“Did Chotey
call you?” Nani asked, her eyes wide with hope.
“Bhere ijj
hamre Arnav bitwaa and Khussi bitiya?” Mami asked. “I am going to the police,”
she claimed.
“Why should
you take the trouble to go to the police, Mamiji?” Aman asked.
“See,”
Shyam yelled at Mami, victorious. “I told you it will be bad for the business
if you register a complaint at the station.”
Mami opened
her mouth to challenge him, but Aman said, “I have brought the police to you,
Mamiji.”
All stared
at Aman in shocked silence.
Aman stood
back.
The Police
Commissioner entered with ten of his officers in uniform.
“What...?”
Nani asked in a low voice. “Where are my Chotey and Khussi bitiya?”
Arnav and
Khushi entered the house. Aman locked the door behind them.
“Arnav
bitwaa!” Mami cried, running to him and throwing herself in his arms. She
pulled him close to her, weeping uncontrollably. “Bhere bere you? Hamre Arnav
bitwaa. You scared your Mami...” she sobbed.
Arnav put
his arms around Mami and patted her back. “We are fine, Mami,” he said softly.
Payal
hugged Khushi, crying all over her.
Nani and
Anjali rushed to Arnav and hugged him, unable to believe their eyes.
Mami moved
to hug Khushi. “Khussi bitiya, my poor bahuriya. Bhat happened to you?” Nani
and Anjali hugged Khushi and wept.
Akash
hugged Arnav and asked after Khushi’s wellbeing.
Shyam alone
stood still like a rock, his eyes as wide as saucers.
“Dekhiye,
hamre Chotey has returned to us. Khushiji too,” Anjali prompted Shyam,
wondering at his silence and stillness.
“Yes,”
Shyam managed to croak. “How—what happened to you, Saale saheb?”
“A lot,”
Arnav replied. “But where are your manners? Akash, offer the Commissioner and
his officers seats.”
Akash
quickly seated everyone in the living room, taking care to station himself
behind Shyam. Aman moved to sit by Akash.
Mami sat by
Arnav and held on to his arm as though afraid that he would vanish if she let
go. Khushi sat on Arnav’s left.
“What
happened to you, Chotey?” Anjali asked.
“The driver
Jijaji arranged to take us to Delhi stopped the car on the way and said that it
had to be repaired. He asked us to alight and stand by the road,” Arnav stated.
All looked
at him.
“Another black
car appeared and two masked men shot at us,” Arnav said casually.
All gasped.
“Kya?”
Anjali couldn’t believe her ears.
“Khooni, chor,
luche, lafange!” Mami shouted, holding her clenched fist in the air. “How dares
you!”
“We managed
to escape,” Arnav said. “We found refuge and got home.”
All sat
staring at Arnav and Khushi.
“It seems
an impossible story,” Shyam said slowly.
“It does,
doesn’t it? But the truth is often stranger than fiction,” Arnav said easily. “Why
didn’t you register a complaint with the police?” Arnav asked conversationally.
Shyam
looked away.
“Damadji
said that it would affect your business if we did so,” Nani replied.
“Really,
Jijaji?” Arnav asked Shyam.
Shyam tried
to smile at him.
“You are so
concerned about my business. I am so...so fortunate,” Arnav complimented him.
“Bhat about
the men who tried to kill my Arnav bitwaa and our bahuriya?” Mami asked the
Commissioner.
“They are
under arrest,” the Commissioner was affability itself.
Shyam’s
phone fell from his hand.
“Kya hua,
Mr. Jha?” he asked.
“Nothing,”
Shyam said, flustered.
The
Commissioner smiled. “I am not surprised that you are shocked, Mr. Jha. After
all, they are your acquaintances.”
“What?” Mami
asked.
Nani and
Anjali stared at the Commissioner and Shyam.
“My
acquaintances? What are you talking about?” Shyam tried blustering his way out.
“Rani sahiba, I don’t understand what he is talking about.”
“You will,
Jijaji,” Arnav said. “Especially when I tell you that the driver you hired to
trap us too has been arrested by the police.”
Shyam
gulped.
“Shyamji...”
Anjali whimpered. “What is this? Chotey?”
“You will
understand soon, Di,” Arnav said, his eyes on Shyam.
“That is
nonsense,” Shyam fought back. “Preposterous.”
“Yes, it
is. You never thought I would get married, did you?” Arnav asked.
Mami and
Nani gasped.
“You were
shocked out of your skull when you landed in Lucknow and found out that I was
getting married along with Akash,” Arnav smiled. “You know, I can almost find
it in myself to pity you. All your plans in the dust...how you must have fretted,
Jijaji! Years of planning and plotting spoiled by my sudden marriage.”
“Chotey, he
is your Jijaji!” Anjali reminded him.
“Ussi ka
rona he,” Arnav sat back, apparently relaxed. “Plotting to run into my Di at
the temple after finding out who she is and how much she is worth, making her
fall for you, persuading her to marry you, fooling us with your sweet words,
waiting and biding your time to get your hands on my money...” Arnav’s voice
trailed away.
“Arnav
bitwaa!” Mami exclaimed.
“This is
the truth, Mami,” he said softly.
“That ijj
bhy he didn’t want me to contact the police!” Mami cried out.
“Chotey,
what is this?” Anjali’s tears flowed down her cheeks.
“The truth,
Di,” Arnav’s eyes were serious as he looked into his sister’s. “Stay with me,
Di. We have been through worse.”
“Arnav is
lying, Rani Sahiba,” Shyam pleaded.
“But...but Chotey never lies,” Anjali whispered. “Chotey, there must be some other
explanation. Your Jijaji, my Shyamji will never do something like this!”
“Chotey...”
Nani wept.
“This is a
lie. Arnav is trying to defame me. Saale sahib, why are you trying to destroy
my relationship with your Di? What will you gain?” Shyam tried to act the
injured party.
“I will be rid
of a parasite with homicidal tendencies,” Arnav was suave in the extreme.
“Chotey!”
Anjali rebuked him.
“Do you
recognise them?” the Commissioner handed over photos of the criminals to Shyam.
Shyam
pretended to study them closely. “No, I don’t know these men,” Shyam said.
“Then why
did you phone them fifteen times today, Mr. Jha?” the Commissioner asked.
There was perfect
silence in the room.
As all
watched in horror, Arnav leaned back in his chair and burst out laughing.
Taking the cue from him, Akash and Aman smiled as though mocking Shyam.
The Raizada
ladies stared at the sight of ASR laughing.
“You are a
fool, Shyam Manohar Jha!” Arnav laughed. “A fool who has lost everything
through his stupidity.”
“I should
have shot you myself instead of hiring those fools,” an enraged Shyam bit out
even as he rushed towards Arnav like a bull that had sighted a red cloth.
Many things
happened that second.
Khushi
stepped forward to stand between a sitting Arnav and Shyam.
Akash and
Aman caught Shyam by his arms and tugged back.
The police
officials raised their revolvers and pointed them at Shyam.
Anjali
fainted.
Arnav stood
up and moved to stand between Shyam and Khushi.
The Raizada ladies ran to check
on Anjali.
“I hope you
have got enough, Commissioner,” Arnav shook the older man’s hand.
“His fate
is sealed,” the Commissioner assured Arnav.
Suddenly
Shyam broke free and snatched an officer’s gun and aimed it at Arnav.
The next
second, six bullets entered Shyam’s chest and he dropped down dead.
I had this page open on my lappy, desky, phone and tabby, since morning. What a skillful stalker am I!!!
ReplyDeleteNow I will go read the update and comment later.
:)
You are the best, Sups!!!
DeleteYeaaa... Bumper dhamaka.... Two updates!
DeleteGosh, I wanna smack that creep really hard. I mean our lovebirds ought to be holed up somewhere, along with a couple of flutes of champagne and a stack of jalebis, exploring each other, falling in love. ;-) And here they are making a beeline for the Commissioner's office. Anyway... am glad that it's finally time to ring down the curtain on 'Shyam Saga' and that Aman would be present for the curtain call.
DeleteWaise, a cup of steaming , frothy Java and an Arshi update for the accompaniment ... sheer bliss. Nothing comes close. Though ASR would certainly disagree with me. In his world ecstasy equals his sweet, beautiful wife plastered to him, holding him tight, riding his bike. :P Nothing comes close!!
Oh yeah, I can see a contrite ASR, blaming himself for circumstances that are beyond his control. All I want him to understand is "Que sera sera, whatever will be, will be. The future's not for us to see."
Kya hum achchhe nahi hai Smitu darling ?
ReplyDeleteLovely update,
And waiting for the next one.
Bahut ache ho. I am blessed to have such lovely and loving readers! Next part in 2 hours.
DeleteLoved it Smita. Can't wait for next update. I will check for it first thing when I wake up tomorrow morning :-)
ReplyDeleteGood night! Sweet ArHi dreams!
DeleteSmita you have made my day 😘
ReplyDelete*Wink* Going to make it more fun today.
Deleteloved the update di.. i loved the bike idea ;) Hope shyam is caught soon.. y is Arnav regretting abut Khushi & payal.. past was not in his hand.. :(
ReplyDeletewaiting for the nxt part..
Superb... I was hoping to read one day part, but you are posting part 7 also today. Yay.. I am very happy.
ReplyDeleteAman is such trusted employee.. He is ever ready to do anything for arnav. Very sweet guy.
Bike ride was fabulous. They have reached Delhi safely. That is a relief.
Waiting for next part. I will read it and then sleep. Do update super soon :-).
Loved part 7 also. Story is moving so fast and I like it. Shyam is gone. That was nicely written.
DeleteAwesome... Loved this story to the core... Shyam is more evil here ... Totally different
ReplyDeleteOoh, lovely update Smita! I'm up at 2:30am reading it. Honestly the tension keeps building! I'm laughing at how Arnav is trying his hardest not to be affected by Khushi's nearness- I'm pretty sure he's gonna snap soon. 😄 looking forward to the part 7- hope it'll be up soon!
ReplyDeleteLovely update! The bike ride was fab! Aman is the best employee ever! Awaiting the 2nd update eagerly :p
ReplyDeleteOh ma
ReplyDeletePoor thing
Or should I say things
Khushi frozen
And arnav trying to control
Bechare ka concentration ain't on journey
But on his beautiful wife
Who he is enchanted by
But who can blame him
Once this creep is outta way
Well then he can focus on her
That was fast
How he was able to get them out of there
And without too much delay
Hmmm ten more minutes
Hope nothing comes in their way
i'm glad that they are safe.. loved how Arnav told Akash ' dont call me Bhai' as oon as he took the call.. always ASR..
ReplyDeleteAmazing update
ReplyDeleteCan't wait for the next update
Please update soon
ReplyDeleteFantastic part. Poor ASR :))) Waiting for next update.
ReplyDeleteFantastic update. Poor ASR :))) Waiting for next update
ReplyDeleteLoved it can't wait for the next bit
ReplyDeleteWaiting up for all that dhamaka .....
ReplyDeleteI refreshed this page every day to see if you uploaded. Wohh.
ReplyDeleteNow, with Arnav having those thoughts of regret, which any right person would feel. I just hope he does not jeopardize his future with Khushi.
Update was amazing. Can't wait for the next update, bring on the beef.
Loved the budding relationship between both.. Both were strangers to each other and now situation have made them caring and understanding of each other.. Waiting to see with this shyam fiasco how there married life ll turn up along with anjali's coning sorrows.. Interesting
ReplyDeleteLoved the story soo far. It's beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThe bond between them developing strong. Arnav is indeed very caring and heart and that is what makes him worth khushi. He may be ASR for the world but never so for his family.
Waiting eagerly for the next part
Good riddance, the snakewa is dead. And now for some much needed Arshi moments, please update soon Smita:-)
ReplyDeletePart 7: okay, what an entry. Wohhh, they should be some dramatic music in the background. Lol
ReplyDeleteMami's character you portrayed so perfectly. She hides her dimmag behind her colourful ghetto.
The end sentence shocked me, I was woah.
thank god evil finished there and then....awesome
ReplyDeleteWOW!!! Loved part 7!!! So much action and drama! Just what I needed this Saturday morning. I've always loved how you've portrayed Mami in your fics. And this time is no less- glad to see her proactive in trying to get in contact with the police. She wasn't taking any on Shyam's nonsense.
ReplyDeleteWords fail me on the grand confrontation with Shyam after Arnav and Khushi's dramatic arrival at Shantivan. You know, sometimes you actually have to feel teensy weensy bit bad for Shyam because he thinks he can get away with murder when we all know that Arnav won't let him do so.
That ending sentence: OMG! Absolutely cannot wait for the next update!!
Wow that was so melodramatic
ReplyDeleteBut so cool
He asked for it
That creep
Shot dead
Good that anj had fainted before thta
She didn't see that
Could have scarred her more
Damn that snake
He thought he could get away with all his schemes
That's dumb of him
Awww Mami was so funny
Well she loves her arnav bitwa
Cares more for him
Than anything negative publicity on their business
Isnt that sweet of her
He himself confessed stupid man
Hope he didn't get anyone when he nicked that gun
That would be disastrous
Well at least he is dead
That chapter over
But poor anj
Hey Devi Maiya... Snakewa iz deadwa....
ReplyDeletewow superb updates loved them both every thing happened so fast can't wait for next part thank you.................ameena671
ReplyDeleteBrilliant update,
ReplyDeleteLoved it very much.
Waiting for the next ...
Brilliant update,
ReplyDeleteLoved it very much.
Waiting for the next ...
Wow... Part 7 was fab...
ReplyDeleteShyam got shot...
Can't Wait for the next update
Mind blowing update
ReplyDeleteLoved it
That was the last thing I expected...I mean the death of shyam....but then his fate was sealed ......now I hope we see some romansewa
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ReplyDeleteSuperb. Shyam is out of their lives for good. Khushi put her self in harms way to save arnav but with akash and Aman around she should not have feared for arnav.
Hope that no one else has been hurt
Continue soon please
glad that Shyam is dead.. hope Anjali recovers soon..
ReplyDeleteLoved part 7. Looking forward to part 8
ReplyDeleteLoved both the parts!!
ReplyDeleteFinally Shyam is dead already!! Glad he is dead!! so much surprises at a go!!!
This story is so lovable!! i bet, if at all you ask all your lovely readers to pick one or say first three stories which they like from your collection, then that means your are putting them in the most critical and stressed situation. people will go mad totally!! so better rule the idea if atall you have!!!
Its seven parts and am thinking how these both will fall in love with each other and will anji see her mate in aman?
Please cont soon!! can i have a update for to night itself???
Atleast come soon
I glad he dead but don't end it here make him and khushie like each other and he accepts her fully in his life
ReplyDeleteWoah! Shyam is dead? :O I'm happy, but sad for Anjali. I hope she is brave enough to take such huge blows.
ReplyDeleteLoved the chapters Smita.
Looking forward to the next update :)
Will post today.
DeleteMany things happened......Arnav and Khushi reached home safely with Aman's support...........Shyam was caught and dead too for trying to kill Arnav...........this is a big blow to Raizadas...........Arnav and Anjali endured so much...........the problems in their lives came to an end with the death of Shyam.............tough time for the family.............
ReplyDeleteAwesome update Smitha!!! Wow a lot happened in these updates!!!
ReplyDeleteWahooo! The snakewa is dead! He deserved that entirely!
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